Part B · Letter to the editor
預測等級3
C5/ 7
L4/ 7
O4/ 7
Σ13/ 21
份報告入面
- 15 處紅筆批改
- 2 組針對性練習
- 一篇 5** 示範改寫
- 5 個生字
I
一個一個咁改，成班嘅問題你係睇唔到嘅
我哋幫機構改 HKDSE English Paper 2。每人一份完整報告，同時出一份成班嘅診斷 —— 邊個錯處係幾多個學生一齊犯。想睇成品，同我哋講一聲，我哋畀 sample 你。
學校 · 補習社 · 教育機構
唔使簽約，唔使畀錢，唔使開戶口。講低你嘅人數同科目就得。
II
呢樣嘢，一份一份改係睇唔到嘅
但五個人入面有四個犯同一個介詞錯 —— 呢個先係你下堂應該教嘅嘢。
一份一份咁改，你見到嘅係「呢個學生嘅問題」。你唔會見到「呢班嘅問題」。
但五個人入面有四個犯同一個介詞錯 —— 呢個先係你下堂應該教嘅嘢。
我哋每一份報告都會標低每個錯處嘅類型，再喺成班度數。數嘅係「幾多個學生」，唔係「錯咗幾多次」—— 一個學生錯十次，唔代表成班有問題。
- 4 / 5 犯同一個介詞錯
- 4 / 5 寫嘅句子要重砌，唔係執
- 4 / 5 可數名詞冇加 s
呢個係一個真實批改批次嘅結果。針對四個人一齊錯嘅嘢上一堂，好過派五份唔同嘅改文 —— 呢個就係「改文」同「用改文嚟教」嘅分別。
一批真實嘅五份卷：三個錯處，每個都係五個學生有四個犯。
III
一份報告，五樣嘢
每個學生一份，喺自己部電話睇，亦都印得出嚟。
- 分數 + 預測 level
- 逐句紅筆批改
- 針對佢弱項嘅練習
- 5** 示範文
- 生字表
I am writing to express my opinions about the importance of sports for teenagers and suggesting ways to encourage more students to lead an active lifestyle.
I am writing to express my opinions about the importance of sports for teenagers and to suggest ways to encourage more students to lead an active lifestyle.
因為前面用咗「to express」，後面應該用「to suggest」保持平行結構 (Parallel structure)，令句子讀落更流暢對稱。
First and foremost ,the importance of sports can be elaborated to three ways—Physiological development, psychological development and personality development.
First and foremost, the importance of sports can be elaborated on in three ways—physiological development, psychological development and personality development.
標點符號打錯位：逗號前面唔需要空格，後面先要。另外，elaborate 應該配搭「on in」，而「physiological」喺句中唔需要大楷。
obesity.From the psychological point of view ,sports can release endorphins and relieve the academic pressure on students in Hong Kong.
obesity. From the psychological point of view, sports can release endorphins and relieve the academic pressure on students in Hong Kong.
句號後漏咗空格，而逗號前面多咗個空格，記得留意標點符號嘅正確打字格式。
Plurality and Countability: Generalization
___ should encourage their children to spend less time on screens.
- A) Parent
- B) Parents
- C) A parents
___ play a crucial role in shaping a teenager's values.
- A) School
- B) A schools
- C) Schools
It is important for ___ to communicate openly with teenagers.
- A) families
- B) family
- C) the family's
I am writing to express my profound concern regarding the sedentary久坐的 lifestyle increasingly adopted by secondary school students in Hong Kong. Nowadays, an alarming number of teenagers are heavily fixated注視；沉迷 on digital devices, often at the expense of regular physical exercise and outdoor sports. In this letter, I would like to elucidate闡明；解釋 the pivotal importance of sports for youth development and propose pragmatic measures to encourage our younger generation to lead a more active lifestyle.
- undermineverb
- 損害Constant comparison undermines students' confidence.
- succumbverb
- 屈服Many students succumb to the lure of late-night gaming.
- pragmaticadjective
- 務實的A pragmatic solution is to stagger lunch hours.
- resilientadjective
- 有韌性的Resilient learners treat mistakes as feedback.
- mitigateverb
- 減輕Green roofs mitigate the heat-island effect.
IV
一條 link，成班嘅嘢喺入面
唔使開戶口，唔使登入，喺手機開得。條 link 有密碼，我哋另外畀你。
- 成班一版睇晒
- 每個學生嘅 C / L / O 分數同一句評語，一版過。
- 撳個名入去睇全份
- 完整報告、改咗嘅原文、佢交上嚟嗰張紙嘅掃描。
- 成班嘅錯處統計
- 邊個錯處幾多個學生一齊犯，由高到低排。
- Print all
- 成班一個 PDF，用你派返落去嗰個次序。要印幾多嘢你揀 —— 淨係評語同批改，定係連練習同答案都要。
V
四步
- I講低你嗰班
幾多人、邊個級、一個學期大概要改幾多篇。一封 email 就夠。
- II睇 sample
我哋畀你睇改好嘅報告同成班嘅診斷實物，唔使你先交嘢畀我哋。
- III傾一個鐘
拆兩三份報告畀你睇個分點樣嚟，講埋成班嗰個 pattern 對你下幾個星期嘅教學代表咩。
- IV收到你嗰班嘅報價
按你實際人數、科目同交嘅密度出返份紙，唔係一個所有機構一樣嘅價錢牌。
VI
系統改，老師把關
機器做嘅係捉錯同歸類，判斷同放行仍然係人。冇老師撳過，一份報告都去唔到學生手上。
- 攞返嗰個週末，用喺備課
- 只有人做到嗰啲時間
- 成班嘅錯處，就係一份課程檢討
機器改得嘅嘢，唔應該用老師啲夜晚嚟換
攞返嗰個週末，用喺備課: 三十份卷本來就係一個週末。攞返嚟，可以用嚟諗點樣教返成班一齊錯嗰個位 —— 呢個先係教學。
只有人做到嗰啲時間: 記得邊個學生上個月卡喺邊、坐低同佢傾兩句、睇得出佢幾時開始想放棄。機器一樣都做唔到，而呢啲先係家長真正畀錢買嘅嘢。
成班嘅錯處，就係一份課程檢討: 邊幾個位要重教、邊幾個位可以跳過。呢啲嘢平時要教好幾年先儲得到，而家每一批卷都會話返你知。
系統改，老師把關
機器做嘅係捉錯同歸類，判斷同放行仍然係人。冇老師撳過，一份報告都去唔到學生手上。
老師簽名
已放行
VII
每份報價都係照你嗰班計
同我哋講一聲，我哋畀改好嘅 sample 你睇，再按你嗰班出份報價。想即刻睇下份報告係咩樣，可以先撳個示範。
Email info@stargaze.hk，講低人數、級別同大概幾時開始。
一個級同一班唔同，一星期一篇同兩個月一篇亦都唔同，要唔要學生 app 又係另一回事。與其擺一個價喺度當所有機構一樣，不如你講低你嘅人數同科目，我哋出返份紙畀你。
- 按你實際人數、科目同交嘅密度計
- 定期做定係一次過改一批，兩種都得
- 學生 app、生字卡、listening 同 reading 可以加，亦可以唔要
- 想睇成品，開口攞 sample 就得，唔使你先交嘢