Part B · Letter to the editor
份報告入面
- 15 處紅筆批改
- 2 組針對性練習
- 一篇 5** 示範改寫
- 5 個生字



I am writing to express my opinions about the importance of sports for teenagers and suggesting ways to encourage more students to lead an active lifestyle.
I am writing to express my opinions about the importance of sports for teenagers and to suggest ways to encourage more students to lead an active lifestyle.
因為前面用咗「to express」,後面應該用「to suggest」保持平行結構 (Parallel structure),令句子讀落更流暢對稱。
First and foremost ,the importance of sports can be elaborated to three ways—Physiological development, psychological development and personality development.
First and foremost, the importance of sports can be elaborated on in three ways—physiological development, psychological development and personality development.
標點符號打錯位:逗號前面唔需要空格,後面先要。另外,elaborate 應該配搭「on in」,而「physiological」喺句中唔需要大楷。
obesity.From the psychological point of view ,sports can release endorphins and relieve the academic pressure on students in Hong Kong.
obesity. From the psychological point of view, sports can release endorphins and relieve the academic pressure on students in Hong Kong.
句號後漏咗空格,而逗號前面多咗個空格,記得留意標點符號嘅正確打字格式。
I am writing to express my profound concern regarding the sedentary久坐的 lifestyle increasingly adopted by secondary school students in Hong Kong. Nowadays, an alarming number of teenagers are heavily fixated注視;沉迷 on digital devices, often at the expense of regular physical exercise and outdoor sports. In this letter, I would like to elucidate闡明;解釋 the pivotal importance of sports for youth development and propose pragmatic measures to encourage our younger generation to lead a more active lifestyle.
一批真實嘅五份卷:三個錯處,每個都係五個學生有四個犯。
一篇文,一份完整報告:分數、逐句紅筆、針對性練習、5** 範文,同你自己嘅生字表。
大型補習社一晚改兩百篇,你嗰篇得三分鐘。
我哋逐句改到底,錯過嘅字自動入你本錯題簿,下星期再考返你。
改喺佢自己寫嗰句字上面,唔係喺旁邊寫「grammar」兩個字。每個錯處都會標低類型,之後喺成班度數返。
Although the plan has many advantages, but it also has some disadvantages.
同一套批改,同一份報告。分別只係點計錢,同埋成班嘅診斷得機構先有。
學校、補習社同教育機構: 每個學生一份完整報告,成班一份錯處診斷。人數、科目同交嘅密度唔同,報價就唔同,所以我哋照你嗰班出返份紙。想睇成品,開口攞 sample。
同學自己嚟: $37/篇 · $148 一個月. 唔使報班都用得。每星期交一篇,出完整報告,錯題自動入錯題簿。人手改一篇市價 $120-150,呢度 $37。
寫呢套系統嘅人,每個星期都要用佢改文。Aaron Sir 而家仍然教緊 F4-F6,每一個功能都係因為有份真實嘅卷先存在。